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Walt we are learning to show not tell

Holiday writing - Show not tell

Writing  Learning outcome.

To rewrite a piece of my recount [Holiday writing] with show sentences and not tell sentences. 

The lagoon was freezing cold, it was like an ice block.. When I hopped in goose bumps appeared because it was freezing cold. When we hopped out I got changed  and I went for a walk with my nana and my cousin. While we were walking we found out that Maungapiko echoes. So I opened my mouth as wide as I could and screamed.

Sestina

Poem #4 A Sestina ✓✓

Each postcard will form one stanza [one part] of a sestina [whole poem].

Think of a specific journey. Long, short, special, everyday, real or fake.

Write six lines about that journey each with only six words, using the following writing prompts.

• Something you saw.  
• Something you remember.
• A person who was with you.
• A wonderful imagined thing that didn’t actually happen
• The reason for your journey.
• Your own six word sentence.

My journey to Te kao

I saw rugby players playing rugby	Path
Cows rumbling fighting in the paddocks	Hopara Explore Sightseeing
My mum was speeding with me	Journey
Landing on a creamy chocolate island	Taunga Position
Aunty left her things up there	Map
My mums name is Jessica Savage	Wahi Place

Walt we are learning to describe things in our on words

The Mad Hatter  - Story Starter

He was a most peculiar looking chap…..

Can you write a character description of the Mad Hatter?

He was a most peculiar looking chap…..

His orange eyebrows look like dried up carrots on his forehead.His makeup is crazy like his personality 

His hair is wild like the wild west;  because it hasn't been brushed.He smells like old fish because he does not wash his clouth 

He sounds like a toy bear

and makeup tastes like bee honey with magic powder in it.

His hair taste like fanta bubbling by my moth

His white makeup looks like paint rolled out on his face.